Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login

In a world after humans,
where animals have evolved to rule in our image;
a group of freedom fighters vie for
separation from the tyrannical TRIUMVIRATE.

This REBELLION, aloft in the heavens with
numerous other kin, call the TOWERS their home,
majestic wonders built millions of years
ago; before the humans' extinction.

Punishing any form of disobedience with
a chastening most cruel – The Triumvirate
maintains a steadfast societal dominance.

In a desperate attempt to gain the upper hand,
the rebels have employed the services of VALESSA,
a young vulpine spy skilled in the art
of reconnaissance. Sending her to The Triumvirate's
amphitheatre, her small chance at attaining
key intelligence is all that stands in the
way between freedom and enslavement for all...
I'm working on a new novel Series to publish under Lapine Literature.
You know how in Star Wars, the text scrolls over the screen to gift context to the ensuing journey?
This is my equivalent for Towers: Episode One: The Fourth Triumvir.
If people start to read and like this. THIS IS THE STARTING POINT, even though it says 000. The next one will be 001, and so on and so forth.

CHANGELOG:
12/03/12
- Changed thousands to millions to make the evolution timeline more believable.
Add a Comment:
 
:iconinkinautumn:
The creative process behind all of this is visibly seen the introduction. I enjoy it word for word, for several reasons in fact. The that you use to write it is unique, as I feel I am reading a story in poetic stanza. I feel like a war is ahead, a bloody and powerful one, as I read each line. The way you easily explain an entire story without spoiling it is incredible, and intrigues me enough to want to read the rest. It is astounding that such creative vision is met with this story, well done. Extremely well done.
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
6 out of 6 deviants thought this was fair.

:iconstarforsaken101:
I don't really have many complaints about this piece. The language is very good and originality ++ due to the terms used. I find it a very intriguing entrance to what is probably going to be an epic tale.

I put a -0.5 in originality simply due to the fact that this kind of story, with animals dominating over humans, has been done before. However, that doesn't really mean that the story will be bad. It's actually quite frightening how punishment is served in this society; it's unfair and humiliating, and thus I think you have a great base for a rebellion kind of story.

Keep it up and well done!
What do you think?
The Artist thought this was FAIR
8 out of 8 deviants thought this was fair.

The Artist has requested Critique on this Artwork

Please sign up or login to post a critique.

:iconeke93:
Eke93 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014
i like what you are doing. i might like to do a piece on your valessa...if you don't mind. and i might post one of my writings i'd love you to critique...keep up your good work
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2014  Professional Writer
Both of your suggestions sound awesome!
Make sure to send me a note.
Reply
:iconwolfcraz-11:
wolfcraz-11 Featured By Owner Edited Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ok now I'm hooked, great now I have to squeeze in time for a novel series that I will think about when I'm supposed to be studying or listening to conversations. :) Superb opening.
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Professional Writer
They aren't very long reads!
I wrote for people who don't have a lot of spare time and can just read like one quick entry a day.
Reply
:iconwolfcraz-11:
wolfcraz-11 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Okay, I'll definitely read 'em. It's hard for me to be sarcastic in real life why do I try on computers I wonder....
Question: Are there no people/humans in this story?
Reply
:iconm1styspl4sh:
M1STYSPL4SH Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really good!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh, THANK YOU!
I hope you enjoy the other entries just as much. ;_;
Reply
:iconfrostdragon102:
Frostdragon102 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
AWESOME!!!
Reply
:iconcry0tex:
Cry0tex Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Student Artist
I like the premise, it appears I've found new reading material ^.^ well done!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Professional Writer
Ooooh, thanks!
I hope you like what I have written so far. Please enjoy. ^_^
I would love to know what you think.
Reply
:iconlostmemoryofadream:
LostMemoryOfADream Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional General Artist
Your work is very well written definitely captures the imagination! It sounds like an epic tale! :D
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh thank you!!!!
I hope it is still epic in your mind once you have read what is written so far! :D
Reply
:iconlostmemoryofadream:
LostMemoryOfADream Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional General Artist
I'm sure it shall be :D Do you mind if I share your link with some other fantasy literature lovers?
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional Writer
No problem at all, please do!
I'd love to hear some feedback from people who prefer this genre.
Reply
:iconshinguamito:
ShinguAmito Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Student General Artist
definitely piqued my interest. Gonna have to come back to this, especially since this is the first furry focused work that I've seen with substance.

I totally thought star wars scroll before I read the description, haha!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional Writer
I love the classic Star Wars scroll.
Giving the reader just enough they need to know to jump in and enjoy the story.
I'm glad you're gonna come back to it because there's much more to it than this entry!
I'm also sure there are more furry focused works with substance, but I'm glad you found it in mine!
Reply
:iconshinguamito:
ShinguAmito Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
There probably is, but passing glances hasn't really provided many hits until recently. I'm not in tune with the community around furries because I generally didn't see the point. But if you give it context, it makes it easier for me to accept.

Star Wars was my childhood. Anything related to episodes 4-6 is remembered fondly :)
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Professional Writer
Aww snap, well you'll love this story then.
Reply
:iconshinguamito:
ShinguAmito Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm definitely hoping I will!
Reply
:iconxrainbowmonster:
xRainbowMonster Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this, I sure am gonna read the rest of the chapters you've uploaded!:)
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional Writer
Oh, thank you so much!
I hope you enjoy them, and I would appreciate any feedback or criticism you can give me.
I hope you enjoy what I've written so far. ^^
Reply
:iconhighlycorrosive:
HighlyCorrosive Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice Beginning keep it up!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2014  Professional Writer
Thank you! You're in for a wild ride and I'd love to hear what you think!
Reply
:iconmisha-taylor:
Misha-Taylor Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The prelude is very well put together! I can't wait to read the rest!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Professional Writer
I'm glad you think so! I'm really glad you do!
I hope you enjoy the rest, I put a lot of effort into them!
Reply
:iconmisha-taylor:
Misha-Taylor Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I most likely will, I like a lot of your art :)
Reply
:iconwhisper292:
Whisper292 Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Great introduction--sounds like an interesting story!
Reply
:iconshadowequinox:
shadowequinox Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Interesting intro!
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks! I was inspired by Star Wars, how the text scrolls across the screen in the beginning.
Reply
:iconshadowequinox:
shadowequinox Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
awesome!
Reply
:iconstanleythecat:
stanleythecat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Artist
Cool
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks sir ;)
I do like the prospect of a cat being able to use DeviantArt
Reply
:iconstanleythecat:
stanleythecat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Artist
Lol and I'm a girl ;)
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Oh sorry! I Couldn't tell from the icon
Reply
:iconstanleythecat:
stanleythecat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Artist
It's ok homie! I'm a tomboy so.., yeah doesn't bother me! I wrote a journal about the premium thing
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks for your support!
Reply
:iconstanleythecat:
stanleythecat Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Student Artist
Your welcome I don't care about winning just help another artist out ;)
Reply
:iconspidermilkshake:
SpiderMilkshake Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
Whoa, I like this prelude... I'm very intrigued by the scrolling text style...

Question: Are the non-human animals evolved to be more anthro? Or are they in their ordinary forms as we know them?

Intrigued... :meow:
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Anthro!!! :)
Reply
:iconwolf-s305:
Wolf-S305 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
this a very interesting story im intrigued :D
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks!
This is just a prelude -- the real story starts in 001, so I hope your intrigue pays off.
Reply
:iconwolf-s305:
Wolf-S305 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
ok :D
Reply
:iconmeanncat:
MeannCat Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this sounds very interesting I'll give it a try (and I know I said I was known as a truthful mean judge, and I am considering I have been informed so by people off DA). I especially love how it's about our animal friends that live on the lower half of life at least in our opinion and how now they haveb ecome more 'humanoid'.
Reply
:iconrupertbluefox:
RupertBlueFox Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow! This is a pretty deep entry. I like the theory that this all takes place after we humans no longer exist, and then animals strive to take over, reflecting the humans' way of life. And I find it quite fascinating that
And I must admit, this is epic. :)
Reply
:iconallyharablade:
AllyharaBlade Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This seems as more of a teaser but i like it. It is like a book jacket almost. It definitely makes you want to read more. Also, I sincerely love the fact that you have a well developed vocabulary. Don't overuse it though or you may lose an audience with a lower reading skill level. Overall, very intriguing. Interested in reading more.
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much!
It's hard for me to regulate my vocabulary.
Since it's just the way I usually talk and write -- it comes naturally and I don't second guess it.
I hope you find the next parts as intriguing and interesting. <3
Reply
:iconallyharablade:
AllyharaBlade Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Sure thing. I updated my journal to include a bit about you as well
Reply
:iconlovelyintensity:
LovelyIntensity Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
This is my very first time reading this. It seems very interesting and I would like to read more :)
Reply
:iconkylelambert:
KyleLambert Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Professional Writer
Please do! And let me know what you think. :)
Reply
:iconlovelyintensity:
LovelyIntensity Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013
Sure will ^_^
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconkylelambert: More from KyleLambert


Featured in Collections

Literature by GetWatchers

Words, words, words... by Kublakhan27

Great Frickin' Literature by TheSkull31


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
November 27, 2012
File Size
990 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
1,595 (2 today)
Favourites
85 (who?)
Comments
180
×